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The Lost Path

She hugged him with tears in her eyes. It was time to go. He had his duties towards the nation. The times were tough but she had to go on. And then one day his dead body came back. She fell down in shock. She had lost her hubby and unborn baby the same day.
P.S: My first attempt at 55 fiction, please bear with me

14 Comments

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    Pratik Mohapatra

    September 7, 2012

    hi. found you on IndiVine. πŸ™‚
    You story is nice. I guess 2 or 3 more tries, and you would start posting even better stories.

    I know its too much to start advising on d first cmmnt itself, but try to be more surprising in stories. πŸ™‚

    Do read my posts in http://pratik-openbuk.blogspot.in/
    I am also not that a big blogger.

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    Harshita Srivastava

    September 7, 2012

    πŸ™‚
    Thank you for your advice Pratik..it helps me get better
    Welcome to my blog

    And I just went through your blog..it's really good

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    sustainable-sphere.com

    September 7, 2012

    Lovely try.Its wonderful indeed.

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    Harshita Srivastava

    September 7, 2012

    Thank you πŸ™‚
    Glad you liked it…

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    sathish kumar

    September 7, 2012

    For me every word counts, every word I take it to head and with your '55' I see your deep patriotism; I Salute.
    looking out for more from you. Kudos.

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    Harshita Srivastava

    September 7, 2012

    Thank you πŸ™‚

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    CA Jitendra Jain

    September 9, 2012

    Super 1…like it

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    Harshita Srivastava

    September 9, 2012

    Thank you πŸ™‚

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    Ashwini C N

    September 10, 2012

    Oh. Tragedy appeals to the soul!. Very nice. For a first attempt, it's just great πŸ™‚

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    Harshita Srivastava

    September 10, 2012

    Thank you Ashwini..Getting a compliment from your side is really motivating πŸ™‚

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    MaNiSh DaLwAnI

    September 11, 2012

    what is it !!!!!!such a waste of time n labor this looks like straight from some "c" grade bollywood movie ……it doesn't go with a talent like yours …..its ….in simple words "pathetic"….

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    Harshita Srivastava

    September 12, 2012

    Criticism accepted…

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    Anu ~*~

    September 15, 2012

    oh Touching post… i really like it .. great going you are !!

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    Harshita Srivastava

    September 15, 2012

    Thanks Anu

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